Andre Said:

College admission essay- what i have so far?

We Answered:

FYI you REALLY SHOULD NOT post your admission essays ONLINE!!!! ARE YOU CRAZY?! ESPECIALLY if you going to use them! Other kids tempted will want to copy it and officials will consider it plagiarism!!! PLEAsE be smart stop submiting your admission essay online

Ronnie Said:

What is the most enjoyable career?

We Answered:

Its gotta be the career you enjoy doing the most.

Interest comes first to determine what profession you want to get into.

Aaron Said:

Options on my "college essay"?

We Answered:

There are some typos and grammatical errors - I would take it to an English teacher or counselor at your school and ask them to proof-read it for you. (Examples - every day - two words, not one. Nevertheless is the word I think you want, not "Nether the less.") Also, I'm not sure your indecision about a major is the best essay topic - rather, I would choose an event from your life that had a major impact on you and also shows your personal growth and your best qualities without boasting (for example, a time you designed something that made a difference in someone's life). Unless the question specifically asked you why you want to major in this subject and attend this school, in which case your topic is appropriate.

Shelly Said:

Please help me correct this essay?

We Answered:

I will do a paragraph as its long. Mostly, your tenses are incorrect. I would also start with the age 4 story as it has a pull., something like:

"At four years of age, I watched my mother care for an aged, bed-bound patient. Later, when my grandmother suffered a debilitating stroke, I helped as much as I could make life easier for her. From then on, I knew I wanted to be a nurse. As I grew older, this certainty only deepened. This is something I truly enjoy doing.

Many times, nurses are the first people patients come in contact with when they enter the hospital. A nurse that is friendly, compassionate, approachable and caring can make all the difference in a patient's illness and recovery. From the experience I gained at home caring for my family, I believe I posses the qualities to excel at nursing.

In addition, I have over 100 hours in community service assisting people (EXPOUND HERE--HOW DID YOU ASSIST THEM?).... Some of the my goals after graduation include specializing in surgical nursing. Surgery is a field I particularly love, however, many areas of nursing ...

I would have someone at school (if you are in one) or another adult help with content & sentence construction and grammatical tense changes for your application.
GOOD LUCK! I hope you get in!

Charlie Said:

can you please tell me what you think of my nursing essay? It is just my rough draft.?

We Answered:

Good essay. I have made a couple of stylistic/grammar changes to enhance readability, and corrected a couple of usage errors.

I wish you the best - we need more dedicated nurses! Feel free to email me with additional questions.

Nursing to me means a better future for my family. As I started a family at a young age, there was little time for college or career. I am a very dedicated mother and chose to be there for my children during their early years. I know that there is nothing more important in the whole world. I am now at the point in my life when a career is very important to me, and am ready to dedicate myself to a career that I have a passion for. That career for me is nursing. I have wanted to be a nurse from a very young age. Every nurse that I have come in contact with has inspired me with knowledge and expertise. A nurse’s ability to care for patients’ complex medical needs and still be a caring and helpful support to patients and families fascinates me.
I am very dedicated to my goal of becoming a nurse, and have worked very hard to make it to this point in my education, always striving to be the best that I can be. I earned a 4.0 GPA at Davenport, WAS OR AM among the top students in most of my classes, and believe that I have proven that I have what it takes to succeed in this challenging career. While taking classes at Davenport I have also prepared myself for nursing by volunteering as a friendly visitor at Season’s Adult Day Care QUESTION - IS IT REALLY POSSESSIVE “SEASON” OR IS IT “SEASONS”?. I have gained experience talking to elderly people with diseases such as Alzheimer’s and dementia. I helped participants at Season’s with activities, games, and exercises. I have made many friends at Season’s and have gained a lot of respect and admiration for the elderly. I have always been very interested in health and wellness, and try to practice healthy living practices every day such as proper nutrition and regular exercise. I believe it is important as a nurse to be a role model for good health. As a nurse I will be an advocate for a healthy lifestyle. Educating patients and their families about health and wellness will be very exciting for me.
Presently, my goal is to become a registered nurse working in the field of geriatrics or rehabilitation. In the future I plan to get a Bachelor’s Degree in Nursing and may work in health education. I know I have the determination and drive to be successful. I will do whatever it takes to accomplish my goals. I have no doubts that if accepted into the nursing program, I will strive to be the top of my class. I am very excited to begin the clinical phase of my education and start building the skills I will use in my career as a nurse.